Chapters of my novel (covert operations & intelligence)

[zombie]

Hello guys,

I had prepared a plot for a spy-thriller novel just after 26/11 or Mumbai attacks. This is a story of a young man who got frustrated by acts of terror and decided to play his part to try and stop such attacks against India and Indian interests across the globe. Was he successful? Did he die in vain? I don’t know, because I have not finished the story yet. I wrote 1.5 chapters today and posted the first chapter. In case you like/dislike my work, please let me know. Views expressed in my novel are strictly my own. I might have got some facts wrong or may not have understood things clearly. Please point those out.

http://comp-const.blogspot.com/2011/07/ ... -fuse.html

Rustom had promised more and Manish was willing to wait. While leaving office, he could not help but feel proud of the organization he worked for. Located at a non-descript building, its name betrayed its function. Named Research & Analysis Wing or RAW for short, it was India’s topmost intelligence agency and he was one of the best spies RAW had ever produced.

http://comp-const.blogspot.com/2011/07/ ... filth.html

Regards,

Zombie

[rraju2805]

great job....

[zombie]

Thanks Raju.

[hvj1]

Hello Zombie,
From one author to another I have a few points to make, some may sound disparaging, hence I will pm you, the objective is not to put you down or sound condescending in any way, but to sincerely try to suggest a few improvements if you may allow me to do so,hence I will pm you my comments if you so desire.
But congratulations on the theme, its sound promising indeed. As a matter of fact, I too had started of on a western novel, but cried of in posting it here, since I may have been off topic.
Best Regards

-- Wed Jul 20, 2011 6:40 pm --

Hello Zombie,
From one author to another I have a few points to make, some may sound disparaging, hence I will pm you, the objective is not to put you down or sound condescending in any way, but to sincerely try to suggest a few improvements if you may allow me to do so,hence I will pm you my comments if you so desire.
But congratulations on the theme, its sound promising indeed. As a matter of fact, I too had started of on a western novel, but cried of in posting it here, since I may have been off topic.
Best Regards

[zombie]

Thanks HVJ1, I am open to suggestions. This post was on the fly. I understand there is lot of scope for improvement.

[hamiclar01]

Kudos to your effort.

Please ensure you copyright your work, you do not want it turning up in another's name.

[gladiatorgarg]

waiting to lay my hand on the book....

[zombie]

Shukriya bhai log. Will act accordingly. No book on the horizon yet. I am writing this one for the masses and don't mind publishing it online. Will definitely copyright my work.

[rraju2805]

Thanks Raju.

It's my pleasure...

I am very fond of story book.
when your novel pulishes , then pls tell me.
I must collect a copy & read it...

[zombie]

Definitely will let you guys know. As and when I talk to any publisher I'll include in the terms that I should get some complimentary copies to distribute to my friends.

[rraju2805]

I AM A STUPID...

[zombie]

Chapter-2: Rivers of blood

Few seconds after that three figures wearing BSF uniform entered his tent carrying silenced weapons. Their leader gave instructions and they started wrapping up tents and collecting gear of dead soldier. Within minutes corpses of 30 BSF troopers were loaded in civilian trucks and taken to unknown location. 30 men wearing BSF uniform now boarded the trucks that once belonged to Negi’s platoon.

http://comp-const.blogspot.com/2011/07/ ... blood.html

[zombie]

Chapter-3: Damage Assessment

“You mean commander of Navy’s SWADS?” asked a senior officer from Directorate General of Forces Intelligence (DGFI) responsible for gathering military intelligence and policing ranks of Bangladeshi armed forces. Special Warfare Diving and Salvage (SWADS) is the elite special operations force of Bangladeshi Navy.
“Yes. He has doubts about true faith and has sold his soul to that great Satan in the West. I have known him for many years. He was a decent man, but after he went to Amrika (USA) for training with their Navy SEALs, he forgot his purpose in life and started thinking like those kafir (unbeliever). He thinks that I am a threat to safety of our country and that my actions have increased hostility between Bangladesh and that country of baniyas (traders)”

http://frustrated-fuse.blogspot.com/201 ... ter-3.html

P.S: I have shifted novel to a separate blog to make it easy for readers. So kindly update your bookmarks and keep your suggestions coming.

[boris]

Nice!!!I too am writing a short novel but its different.The main character of my story is an ex Maj. Gen. from the PARA(SF) who is pulled out of retirement and tasked to form a new SF unit on the lines of Delta and Team 6.

[zombie]

Wow. That is pretty interesting Boris. Let me know if you need any help on the technical side. I had did some sand box kind of stuff about ORBAT for SF command and stuff. Would be glad to assist.